dark angel

Subject: dark angel Fri Oct 12, 2012 11:53 pm

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dark angel ShikyoYakamura

===IDENTITY===[/center]
Full Name:sartorius bowman
Nickname(s):da (short for his codename)
Codename:dark angel
Alias(es):angel
Age:19
Classification:human but some say he is a angel
Affiliation:hero

===PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION===

Hair Color:black and white
Eye Color:white
Height:6'8
Weight:180
Other Traits:he has pair of black wings that he can use to fly with

===POWERS===

Powers:
(main)dark force manipulation:he can control darkforces like negative,reverse, and corupt forces there is a few limitations to this power though
Energy is extremely dangerous and destructive
Accidental release of negative energy may occur
Dark energy feeds off positive energy,and as such,they cancel each other out
even with those limitations he has turned this into his main powers.

(main) wing manifestation:he is able to manifest wings that are attached to his body allowing him flight.they can protect from rear attacks. his limitations are
Because of the size of the wings needed, has to have enough room for both the lift-off and flight itself, not to mention enough speed to avoid stalling.
Flight-ceiling depends of both the density of air needed to fly and breath

(side)darkness energy blasts:has ability to release darkness energy attacks of various shapes and/or intensities he can release huge rays of pure energy he can generate blasts through weapons, tools or any part of his body. just like his flight he also has all the limitations of darkforce manipulation plus a few limitations of enrgy blast
Firing involuntary reaction, released in constant stream.
can get exhausted when too much energy is used
can be over-charged/wounded if too much energy is used at once
he needs control to avoid unnecessary destruction

(side)Darkness Force-Field Generation:just like a force field he is able to create a shield, wall or a field to protect himself or someone else his limitations for this power is
he can only keep barriers up for only 10 minutes.
he require great concentration to keep the barrier up
he also Requires focus to create the barrier
this is one of his most hardest powers for him to use.

Skills:he is very good at cooking and he can also fight pretty good with his dagger

Weaknesses:positive energy because to much can negate his darforces, people with a strong mind because they can sometimes be able to brake his manipulation of there senses,people withe enhanced intelligence because they can see threw his sense manipulation, distractions because he needs concentration to make a barrier to protect himself when attacked, high altitude because if he goes to high in altitude then he can catch altitude sickness,and to much energy being put into his energy blasts because they can make him pass out or wear him out to quick if to much is put in to a energy blast also it could hurt him

Equipment:He carrys around a dagger inside of a black case on the side of his arm

===PSYCHOLOGICAL PROFILE===

Personality:He is cold, manipulating, cynical, strict, and bitter.he likes the darkness chaos, being alone,and money. he dislikes snakes, cats, bats, demons, bugs, spiders, and dolls. the usual mood he is in is a mad and angry mood. his characteristics are the fact he is very reblius, he can keep a grudge, and does not like being around people that care about him.his thought process is very fast he usually thinks of very bad things like taking over the world.mental state is very buff and skinny.

Strengths:negative forces,corrupt forces,his wing, and his own anger

Interests/Habits:he has a bad habit of chewing on his finger nails and pooping his fingers

===PERSONAL BACKGROUND===

Family Members:The only people in his family is his uncle john his aunt lily his mother his father and his little half brother willy
Place of Origin:He was born in Missouri USA
Current City:jump city
History:he was born with his wings everyone considered him as a freak when he was born he his powers were in him since he was born but didn't come in until later he got the special gene from his father. When he was 2 year old his parents got a divorce. Than when he was 5 he got his first power darkforces manipulation. When he was 6 his mom met a guy online named Robert they just hited it off when they first met. When he was 7 his mother got remarried to the guy she met online. When he was 8 his second power flight came in. When he was 9 his mother got pregnant giving birth to his brother willy. When he was 10 his third power came in darkness energy blast. Robert was fine with dark force manipulation and his wings but when he got another power and Willy didn't he was mad at sartorius being special and Willy not. When he was 14 he got his 4 and final power darkness force field. When he was 17 he found a person named Katrina Allback that was ill he fell in love with her at first sight. Then one day when he was 18 Katrina died because of her sickness.he decided to head to jump city he herd that it was a pretty nice city. but when he got there it was in worse condition then every one made it out to be or at least from his prospective it was worse then they described

Sample RP:as satorius walked down the street he could hear the comments of the people he was walking past they were calling him a freak. all of a sudden someone ran up to and tried to stab him in the back luckily the blade was blocked from getting to any farther of his back he turned around as soon as he felt the pain from his wings he garbed the guy by the shirt and wrapped and pulled his ear close to his mouth whispering to him "now since im a civilized person i will let you go but if you ever do that again i will take you up so high you might as well be dead

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Claimed. I will review this character. Expect a reply soon.

-Dar

Subject: Re: dark angel Sat Oct 13, 2012 1:39 pm

okay how long is soon for you

Guest

Okay, you're at a good start, but your profile needs some more work. Please make the following changes by editing your original post with the "Edit" button.

Dark Force- What is dark force energy and what does it do? How will he use this power?

Flight- How fast can he fly at maximum speed? Also, you mention his wings can block attacks. How tough are they, and what would be able to break through them? It's a bit unclear whether he always has his wings or if they suddenly appear when he 'manifests' them. Please make the distinction.

Energy Blasts- How much damage do they do? What would be able to block or stop them?

Force Field- How much punishment can it take? What would be able to bring it down before the 10 minutes are up?

Under Interests and Habits, I think you mean he "pops" his finger. Please make the change.

Throughout this profile, your writing should improve. I would like to see complete sentences whenever possible. Remember, we want everyone to quickly and easily be able to learn all they need to about your character from this profile. Please do your best to make it reader-friendly, and show off your writing skills.

Also, your RP sample needs to improve. We do set standards for RP, and right now, your sample isn't up to par. Again, complete sentences are a must. Break up different thoughts into different paragraphs, and keep everything clear. If you would like more help with this, I would be more than happy to help you.

Once all these changes have been made, post again in this thread to let me know. I will then take a second look at this character. Thank you.

-Dar

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