Madeline Wendell Hawthorn finshed second approval needed

"ARE YOU MAD KID?" "Why yes, yes I am thank you for noticing."




Full Name: Madeline Wendell Hawthorn
Nickname(s): Maddie Hattie, the showwoman of wonderland
Codename: The Mad Hat
Alias(es):none
Age: 9
Classification:Mad magic user(Aspiring lord of Order of wonderland)
Affiliation:Lawful good





Hair Color: silver
Eye Color: sapphire blue
Height: 3' 6in
Weight: 65 pounds
Other Traits:carries her father cain with her at all times its shrunk to fit her it is a basic cain with a large gold bulb with a W in the center of the top of the blub.




Powers:
Magic: Maddie has her fathers and the essence of wonderlands magic in her  



growth/shrink: Maddie can shrink or grow her and her toys and things in her environment  to the size of a mouse or the size of a elephant this can not work on other people this also gives her and toys the strength that is relevant to their to their size the max they can lift is 10 tons

bringing toys to life:This is her favorite spell to use when this spell hits a toy it is given life and limited free will as they can not harm those she does not want them to this also turns her toy weapons into real weapons

Magi: One of her mothers dolls that she had when she was younger and maddie's favorite she got it from her mom before she was sent to earth. this doll is pink haired,  red eyed, rabbit eared girl. she wears a green dress with a tinted green see through hoop skirt over a normal skirt large heeled dress shoes the knife in her shoe and her wand are her favorite things to use aginst those that would hurt Maddie the wand does nothing but it makes a good baton to fight with. She also has the sense of smell and hearing of a rabbit. Magi is a tomboy through and through despite having to wear a dress all the time. She can be killed like a normal human when she is alive and will revert back to a normal doll when she dies.



Mr.Snake: a half human half snake toy that she found and the only boy toy she has much to his dismay as he is subjugated to play tea with her or not be alive at all he has all the abilities of a python he can crush you but most of the time he just wraps around you squeezes you tight enough that you can't get away till the cops show up. He is rash and seriouse most of the time accept when he has to play tea party then he is either banging his head aginst the table slithering away trying to escape or whining that he belongs to a little girl that will sadly never out grow the tea party phase due to being the daughter of the mad hatter. Can be killed in any way a human can be killed and will return to doll forum should he die.



Lady lion: She is a pink lion with green eyes she is the lady of the group and is a mother figure to Maddie often scolding her for not behaving lady like or just doing something stupid in battle. However dispite her kind nature she will maule you to death if you make her mad by harming maddie in anyway. She will revert back to a normal toy upon her death she can be killed like a normal lion.


spells:

Turing the room: Maddie  can cause the room to flip upside down or sideways as if it was built that way every object in the room is left undisturbed as if everything being upside down is natural like wise with the room being sideways. She can do this to a whole building and control where the door way leads like if say your living room lead to your kitchen it could lead to the door to your back yard. The gravity of the room stays the same so if the room is turned upside down the ceiling would be the new floor so animals and people (her and her dolls included) would be stuck on the ceiling till she turns the room back to normal. This can only be done inside a building and the doorways can only take you within the building itself or exit the building if you find the doorway to the outside  say on the second floor you would exit out of the building on the ground level and if you where to re enter the doorway you would end up back on the second floor.
 
 
Skills:
beginner  sword user: she knows how to use it but is easily disarmed

beginner bow user: she knows how to use it but will miss 4 out of 6 shots

basic hand to hand combat: She knows only enough to defend herself and thats it
Weaknesses:
breaking her cain: she can't cast spells with out her cain besides repair and then her cain is dead for rest of thread

removing her hat: With out her hat her magic is gone is a normal little girl if she has a severed limb or head she will die of blood loss if not sown back on or bandaged or if head she is dead.

holding magi hostage: if you steal her favorite doll and threaten to break her she will instantly surrender if as long as you don't break her you break her she will have no mercy on you.

zombie mask or zombies: She was scared on her first day on earth without her parnets she saw a horror film featuring zombies and there was a zombie convention in town she didn't know it was all fake and thus has a fear of graveyards, the dead and zombies.


Equipment:
Cane:Her fathers cane it is how her magic worksa basic cain with a large gold bulb with a W in the center of the top of the blub.

Hat:Maddie's hat gives her here magic pink top hat with a black bow tied around it.

sword:A toy sword harmless right not in maddie's hands shrunk to fit in her pocket

bow:toy bow and arrows they can't hurt anyone if maddie wasn't the owner of them shrunk to fit in her pocket.

ax: toy ax she might just take your head off with it


Personality: While she seems niave she is just a child that has never seen the real world except to go to the circus or fairs. So she tends to question everything. She is easily excitable and loves to play games with friends. She is always willing to help but tends to make the problem worse. She tends to miss the signs that someone wants her to go away and will pester people till they get upset. She hates to be yelled at will easily start to cry if you yell at her or she will get mad and sick one of her lion toys on you. She loves her toys especially her mother's doll magi that she gave her you mess with magi and you risk your health. As the child of the mad hatter and alice she is very random in her actions and speech at times make no sense accept to her or require some thought to understand

Strengths:
kind: Maddie is kind even to her enemies and is willing to help them out as long as it doesn't involve anything evil.

brave:Maddie will rush in to battle with out fear for herself

determend: when she sets her mind to something she won't stop till she gets it

neat: She has to have everything in a ceratain order though it does not seem like it as it is neat by wonderland standards

Interests/Habits:
spining her cain: she spins her cain when bored

taking apart eletronics: She wants to know how they work so she will take them apart.

playing with her toys: She is always playing with one toy or the other


Family Members: the mad hatter(dad), Alice Hawthorn(mother), Alicia(sister),The white queen(godmother), tweedlie dee and tweedlie dum(honory uncles)
Place of Origin:wonderland
History:Wonderland has always existed as a real world with entrances to it form this world Alice was the first to find said entrance at the park one day. She would eventually fall in love with a boy there called the mad hatter.  They would be sepreated by a war between the ruling sisters the red and white queen. After sometime she would return to wonderland and help end the war and marry the mad hatter and the red queen banished for life. After several years alicia and maddie was born each took after their parents maddie was mad like her father her sister was more sane like her mother wonderland added its magic to theirs so that they like their parents become the lords of choas should something happen to her parents. As maddie and her sister grew Alicia would come to hate her family and the rest of wonderland as she had always been different and more interested in the real world and often sneek off to the real world and learn. One day Alicia was found sneaking off to the real world by the red queen she would then befriend her enjoying having a normal conversation for once she would then be manipulated by the red queen. Till she became her most loyal subject and would help her raise a army of dark creatures to help take over wonderland.
 
By the time the rest of wonderland found out it was to late and the red queen conquared the land before it was to late. Maddie would be sent to  jump city with several other exiles and her honory uncles while her godmother and parents helped start a resistance . The exiles would come across a abandoned amusement park slash circus. They would repair it thanks to maddie and would live there as they would everone would assume they where just in costumes thanks to learning of the story of wonderland when they came across a book of someone who had visted it before a man named  Charles Lutwidge Dodgson. Maddie would soon learn of the superheros and supervillains of the world she would become a hero and try to help the people the best she could.  
Sample rp:

Bump

Claimed. Expect a reply soon.

-Dar

Bottom Line: Right now, Maddie is too powerful. She technically has 4 full power slots in use. We need to get that down to 3. I would suggest taking some extra time to think about what you want this character to do the most. The powers section might be easier to re-imagine than 'fix.' Otherwise, the following edits will need to be made.


Magic in General- How does she go about casting a spell? Are there certain gestures she has to make? Words she has to say?

Big/Small- This is too strong to be considered a spell. It's a full-on power, even if she achieves it through magical means. She can turn herself either big or small, granting her either might or evasion. In addition to this, she can change the size of other objects, including her dolls. We need to know how many tons she can lift when she is at her biggest (elephant size), and the same info is needed for the dolls.

Bringing Toys to Life- This should also be considered a full power. Each of the dolls she can summon would be considered a sub-power. The number of toys she can bring to life should be limited to 3. She has 9 right now (counting an unknown number of jacks as 1).

Teleporting- The way this is written right now, this would also be considered a power. Teleportation can only be a spell if it is very limited. Being able to take 5 people and go anywhere she has already been is pretty powerful. For this to be a spell, it would need to be limited to:

-Locations in sight
-Just her
-Long cool-down

Spell-Casting-
-Why is it a 'personal' gravity shift if she can put it on 5 other people?
-It seems like turning the room only affects living things. This spell needs to be described more clearly.
-Depending on how much concentration it takes to cast a spell, I'm not sure she would be able to cast Limb Reattachment after having her arm or leg cut off. She would obviously be in a lot of pain, and would probably go into shock before having a chance to cast her spell, much less grab the actual limb.

editied I think I found a way that should make turning the room make sense if not let me know and I will just get rid of it.

Turn the room makes much more sense now. However, you should remove Gravity Manipulation and the sub-power of Flight, since they do not seem to apply as I originally thought.

Good job on the doll descriptions! I have a much better understanding of them now.

Equipment- Add her cane in the equipment section, stating once again that she uses it to work her magic. Also mention her hat and her sword (if she normally carries one).

Edit in those few things, and I think we should be good.

-Dar

edited

I have no problems with the app;