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RageofArgos Delta-class Metahuman
Posts : 589 Join date : 2011-07-06 Age : 29 Location : Flying above the wad of clouds
RPG character Name: Katera Duncan/Chrissy Ma'ar Marwell Code Name: Typhoon/Salamander Villain or good guy?: Neutral
| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Sun Aug 14, 2011 11:55 am | |
| could this time things get really done,im feeling like a grammar puppet | |
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| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Mon Aug 15, 2011 12:57 am | |
| Things getting done has always been up to you. Believe me, if I had even touched on the grammar in this profile, I would still be writing my notes. In any case, you made the changes needed (although strengths is strangely empty), so I hereby, and finally say: |
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RageofArgos Delta-class Metahuman
Posts : 589 Join date : 2011-07-06 Age : 29 Location : Flying above the wad of clouds
RPG character Name: Katera Duncan/Chrissy Ma'ar Marwell Code Name: Typhoon/Salamander Villain or good guy?: Neutral
| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Sun Oct 21, 2012 11:51 am | |
| made a little revamp by adding a newer power if it shouldnt be so wrong and may i ask that she can be up into the active section | |
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| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Mon Oct 22, 2012 9:56 pm | |
| What exactly did you change? |
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RageofArgos Delta-class Metahuman
Posts : 589 Join date : 2011-07-06 Age : 29 Location : Flying above the wad of clouds
RPG character Name: Katera Duncan/Chrissy Ma'ar Marwell Code Name: Typhoon/Salamander Villain or good guy?: Neutral
| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Tue Oct 23, 2012 12:20 pm | |
| i added her Enhanced Senses | |
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| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Tue Oct 23, 2012 6:29 pm | |
| Ah, very good. I couldn't remember if those were there before. Re-Approved. |
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RageofArgos Delta-class Metahuman
Posts : 589 Join date : 2011-07-06 Age : 29 Location : Flying above the wad of clouds
RPG character Name: Katera Duncan/Chrissy Ma'ar Marwell Code Name: Typhoon/Salamander Villain or good guy?: Neutral
| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Tue Oct 23, 2012 6:59 pm | |
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RageofArgos Delta-class Metahuman
Posts : 589 Join date : 2011-07-06 Age : 29 Location : Flying above the wad of clouds
RPG character Name: Katera Duncan/Chrissy Ma'ar Marwell Code Name: Typhoon/Salamander Villain or good guy?: Neutral
| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Fri Dec 14, 2012 9:28 pm | |
| newer changes made i took down her martial arts power by exchanging it with Precognition,as i added a second weakness to be quite fair on this and lastly i modified my Afiliation rank otherwise im ready for a third approval ^^ | |
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Mekasoundwave Skilled Metahuman
Posts : 150 Join date : 2011-08-09 Age : 29
RPG character Name: Code Name: Villain or good guy?:
| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Tue Dec 18, 2012 7:17 pm | |
| Okay, the change of powers is okay, but I'd like more of an explanation of her precognition power. Can she control what she see? How far ahead can she see? How long do the visions last? Are the visions easy to understand?
Also, I'd recommend adding the extra details on the power you put in her weakness section to the actual Power description. Good idea adding it as a weakness, though. I get the feeling precognition is something you'd want to be as clear as possible with, just so it isn't abused. | |
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RageofArgos Delta-class Metahuman
Posts : 589 Join date : 2011-07-06 Age : 29 Location : Flying above the wad of clouds
RPG character Name: Katera Duncan/Chrissy Ma'ar Marwell Code Name: Typhoon/Salamander Villain or good guy?: Neutral
| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Tue Dec 18, 2012 8:11 pm | |
| finally came to edit,im up to see if its alright this time ^^ | |
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Mekasoundwave Skilled Metahuman
Posts : 150 Join date : 2011-08-09 Age : 29
RPG character Name: Code Name: Villain or good guy?:
| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Tue Dec 18, 2012 9:04 pm | |
| Definitely better.
Unless any other mods have objections to this (and I would like a second opinion), I'm gonna give this a Re-Approval. | |
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RageofArgos Delta-class Metahuman
Posts : 589 Join date : 2011-07-06 Age : 29 Location : Flying above the wad of clouds
RPG character Name: Katera Duncan/Chrissy Ma'ar Marwell Code Name: Typhoon/Salamander Villain or good guy?: Neutral
| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Wed Dec 19, 2012 1:23 pm | |
| thank you | |
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RageofArgos Delta-class Metahuman
Posts : 589 Join date : 2011-07-06 Age : 29 Location : Flying above the wad of clouds
RPG character Name: Katera Duncan/Chrissy Ma'ar Marwell Code Name: Typhoon/Salamander Villain or good guy?: Neutral
| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Mon Jun 10, 2013 4:43 pm | |
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Kyte The Acrimonious
Posts : 4697 Join date : 2011-02-26 Age : 30 Location : The hollowed end...
RPG character Name: Kyte Code Name: Akunin Villain or good guy?: Evil
| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Tue Jun 18, 2013 6:17 pm | |
| Claimed by the devil in the pale moonlight. | |
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Kyte The Acrimonious
Posts : 4697 Join date : 2011-02-26 Age : 30 Location : The hollowed end...
RPG character Name: Kyte Code Name: Akunin Villain or good guy?: Evil
| Subject: Re: Katera(Rebooted) Tue Jun 18, 2013 11:32 pm | |
| Okay, a few issues with this.
The reboot states you can have 3 powers with 2 sub-powers each. I'll let flight slide, since your character is one with wings. You list your powers as Precognition and Thunder/Fire bending. This looks alright at first, except in the very description of Thunder/Fire bending you also have what seems to be light manipulation in the form of lasers and what seems to be wind manipulation. Those powers are in no way related to fire and lightning, and as such, I see it as fire manipulation, lightning manipulation, wind manipulation, and light manipulation. 4 separate powers with Precognition, adding up to 5 powers. Please fix these errors.
Onto the next matter. Does Precognition allow Katera to predict someone's attacks?
The final issue. You mention in Katera's equipment that she carries around feathers to help her abilities, but nowhere in your application does it state how this happens. How do feathers help your abilities? | |
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