Dead Master (Finished)

Claimed. Expect a reply soon.

-Dar

Edits made.

Thanks for your patience. I've been out of town the last few days. I'll be posting final comments soon.

-Dar

Starting a Game- How long does it take her to enforce the rules of a game? Are there any gestures, riddles, incantations involved? What is the range in which she can enforce a game? How many opponents can she enforce the rules on at one time? I'm assuming that she can only enforce 1 game at a time, correct? What is the minimum time between games?

Riddles vs Gibberish- As we discussed before, there has to be some way for logically find out what the rules of the games are. The rules for the color game are fine now, since the other player doesn't need to call out a color of their own in order to deal damage. Still, it should be made clear whether only Cain can call out the color, or whether opponents can chose to take a color other that what he calls out. The Risk/Reward system should be explained again with this in mind. As a suggestion to add some flavor, Cain could say some sort of riddle when she instigates a game (not only this one, but all of them). Considering she has a riddle as her character quote, I'd say this would be appropriate. I'm no poet, but something like "If you attack...go for the black," (again, bad example) would explain the rules for each game in a cryptic, yet decipherable way.

Mountain Demon and Shadow Demon need some sort of clue as to the rules. They could have riddles of their own.

Slender is fine, but seems to be a last resort move.

Liar Liar is fine, since she has to obey her own rules.

Blank Slate is fine, because opponents must agree to the rules.

Alchemy- Being able to perform alchemy would probably be considered a power, unless otherwise explained.

Magical Staff- Magical or otherwise wondrous items count towards power limits, so either the staff, martial arts, or peak condition would have to go. Martial arts or peak human condition could be downgraded into skills like martial arts experience (instead of mastery) or "good" physical conditioning (instead of peak). The staff could be nerfed as well. If you choose to keep the staff, then we need a list of the things it can transmutate into.

A second at most.

She needs to speak the name.

Range is not a factor of invoking a game. However she can't just think of someone and initiate it. She has to be nearby them.

As many opponents as is necessary.

Correct.

If she "wins" a game, Cain can start another one that instant. If she suspends a game, I suppose you're going to make it take at least five minutes until she can start another one.

I never made it clear because there was a grammatical error. When I said "both players pick a color", I meant they each choose a color.

I'll expand on the risk/reward system.

Not really a point, and I don't mean to lecture you, but it isn't a riddle; it's merely a verse of a poem by Ripley. I'll put the excerpt here if you're curious, but the meaning of the entire section (And the outlining verse I used as a quote) is one must accept self-imposed limitations for the sake of stability.

If you're really interested...:

However I suppose that's deviating from the point. I like the riddle idea, but riddles are only fun when you don't rehash them. I'll use the riddles if I can use different ones each time with the condition that they have to have the same answer for each game it's supplied for.

Slender is a last resort move. It takes a great deal of stamina from Cain (Though she can still move quickly and the like), and Slender on its own is naturally fear-inducing to Cain because she can barely control it. Every time she uses it she has nightmares of it for a few weeks (Just as any other player could), and she uses it when she absolutely NEEDS to stop someone.

I'm glad Liar, Liar got through, but I'd like to point out she has to follow her own rules with every game.

Alchemy was more referring to the fact that she has great scientific knowledge in physics and chemistry and the like, but it only really applies to transmuting her staff.

I'll remove the transmutation.

From my understanding of the rules, us magic users get two additional spells for every power we don't have. Can Cain have two more games, because I was sure magic users could have a maximum of ten spells.

Being nearby someone would make range a factor.

Let me know when you update the risk/reward system.

Riddles were just a suggestion. As long as there is some way to deduce the rules of the game before the opponent is dead, then its fine. Saying the name of the game in Japanese is not quite good enough. If it is said in both Japanese and English, I guess that would be fine.

Wait, she can control Slender at all? If she obeys the rules of her games, then she shouldn't be able to do that. Her opponent will certainly not be able to do that.

Okay, I apparently couldn't count last night, but here's how the powers stand.

Magic Games counts for 2 powers. (This isn't a problem. Don't freak out.) Each use of spellcasting towards your power limit gives you 3 spells. Maximum spell limit is therefore 9, not 10 (that was before the reboot). Cain has 6 spells now, and 1 additional power of martial arts mastery. Subpowers for Martial Arts are weapons training and peak conditioning. That's all fine, but she can't gain an additional game.

If transmutation is removed from the staff, it could possibly be counted as a freebie. I'm on the fence about Cain being able to call the weapon to her hand, so I'll need to think about that for a moment. The staff is already indestructible and will burn anyone else who tries to touch it.

Note of clarification: will the staff burn someone if Cain hits them with it and it touches their skin that way?

Would 30 feet be acceptable?

As I stated, she can barely control Slender. Not so much as to make it go after someone else, but to prevent it from killing anyone when the game's over. Leaving them unconscious with a severe case of insanity is the most she can mollify it.

Take your time. For the clarification, no, it doesn't burn someone on contact. It's more of a "weapon chooses its wielder" kind of deal. In the Kingdom Hearts franchise, a keyblade will always return to you a few moments after it leaves your hand. In the Naruto series, a sword named Samehada will sprout spikes and spines from its handle when someone it doesn't favor tries wielding it. The burning is to prevent someone from taking the staff from Cain.

As long as she says the name of each game in English and Japanese, or gives some sort of riddle when she starts each game, then this character has my approval.



PS, remember to remove the transmutation ability from the staff.

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I can't approve this as it is. Needs to be much weaker, and she cannot automatically impose games that take away powers on anyone.

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I've added all the requested edits you mentioned in chat.